It took some effort, and my muscles screamed and protested every inch of the way, but I forced myself first into a seated and upright position on the marble slab, and then as circulation returned to my legs I pushed up onto my feet again.
Like Lazarus, I had risen.
One thing was for sure, I’d better not get into any fights for a while. Sometimes you just get a sense of where you stand relative to sea level, and I felt sure I was in some underground chamber beneath the city. I gazed up at the barred windows – each one too narrow for a man to squeeze through – and I got the sense that the windows were at street level, approximately fourteen feet above me.
I took a deep breath, and then another deep breath. Each breath hurt, but not nearly as badly as in the narrow side passage when Sally and Kayra had been fighting like two rival alley cats.
This had to be some sort of mausoleum; somewhere that bodies could be taken to and stored prior to any official funeral rites being served. I had no idea how I had survived the toxin, but then I had no idea either why a passing sleen had chewed through my leather bindings when Sally had left me to die in the woods. I was beginning to wonder if supernatural forces really were keeping me alive for some unfathomable reason.
What had happened after I had passed out? Where was Kayra? Had Sally Reeves succeeded in convincing the Torcadino men that she was a victim? Had she taken Kayra? Or were they both now in the custody of the city, pending investigations for my… I couldn’t help but smile… my murder? Hell, yeah, if I was lying on a marble slab in a subterranean mausoleum in Torcadino then I must have been declared dead. That made the Lady Salena a killer. Her fate hinged on whether the men believed she was fighting in self-defence or whether it was pre-meditated murder. I seemed to recall one man taking her side and another man interrogating her, but my memory was unreliable. The words that were spoken might come back in time.
But one thing I did remember. One thing I picked up on even while I was dying. Kayra had said, ‘I am the property of Roland of Corcyrus. I am his slave.’ Those were words of self-enslavement, regardless of the situation. Kayra had pronounced herself a slave. She couldn’t take the words back any more than Nia could. Did she understand the enormity of those words, or had she spoken them in haste, and just as quickly forgotten them? For she was just Kayra now. The former Laetitia, daughter of a Tatrix, was gone. That girl no longer existed, and never would ever again.
Luckily for Kayra, I was somewhat pragmatic. The companionship with the Ubar’s son had to happen, come hell or high water. The stakes were simply too high. Kayra was a slave now, but she’d still companion the Ubar’s son if I had any say in the matter. Her self-enslavement was an inconvenience that I’d just have to ignore.
I gazed at the bodies of men and women who hadn’t done as well as I had, and then I just sat there for a while, regaining strength. This was the second time Sally Reeve had taken me out of the game. Perhaps I was misjudging her. Perhaps I was guilty of thinking her less capable because of her sex. Did she have Kayra now? If so, she had probably already left Torcadino by tarn. Kayra would have been her bound and helpless baggage as she was carried back to Argentum in a tarn basket. We would have lost, Corcyrus would have lost. I could only hope that Kayra was somewhere else; that the man who had been suspicious of Sally remained suspicious enough to have Sally taken into custody for an investigation into my death. Sally wasn’t a citizen of Torcadino so there was a higher bar than usual to satisfy in killing a man by poison. She would have to demonstrate it was a matter of last resort. That said, I wasn’t of Torcadino either. My death meant less to the citizens of Torcadino than the death of one of their own. The fact that I was of Corcyrus while she was from Argentum would suggest that the conflict had spilled over into the streets of their city. It might raise enough questions to keep Sally confined for a day or two. In the long term she probably had powerful friends within the city – longstanding agents of Argentum and diplomatic channels that could smooth things over, but that would take time and effort.
I smiled as I recalled her rather naïve words. Women are superior to men in all respects… save for a few inconsequential physical traits. On the contrary, Miss Sally Reeve, I think you will find that, here on Gor at least, those physical differences are hardly inconsequential. Here on Gor, physical strength meant the different between domination and submission.
I rose from where I sat on the marble slab and began to pace about the chamber of the mausoleum, tracing my way along the walls with my fingers. My eyes had become accustomed to the darkness, and with a little moonlight I was able to navigate adequately enough. There was only one entrance to this chamber and it was sealed with a set of iron railings that were locked shut. I didn’t think anyone was concerned about stopping the dead from escaping, so possibly this was to deter body snatchers. I rattled the iron gate and shouted in case there was anyone in the corridors and chambers beyond this one, but got no reply. It appears I was sealed in with the dead for the night. This worried me. Time wasn’t on my side. Whatever situation Kayra found herself in wouldn’t be good. The longer I spent locked in here the worse it would be for her. I imagined her locked in some city slave pen, sharing a cage with other slaves. And that was the best possibility that I could imagine – one that didn’t involve her being carried away from Torcadino in a tarn basket.
And what of her unbranded thigh? That was the nightmare scenario, that the authorities who had her would mark her thigh with a kef. That would be game over for the Corcyrus/Torcadino alliance. There was no going back from having a brand. While the city authorities might ordinarily defer to the wishes of a slave’s owner, if they thought I was dead, and if Kayra was now city property pending any sort of inheritance claim, they might well go ahead and brand her. I shook the iron railings again even more violently than before and shouted at the top of my voice. I needed to get out of here and find out what had happened. And I needed to find Adam and Felix. But as I threw my body weight again and again against the iron railings I came to the inevitable conclusion that I was locked in here for the night.
And so I paced and I sat in alternating bouts of bleak frustration until day break.
I had considered lying on the marble slab and going full ‘Walking Dead’ when the mausoleum attendant arrived in the morning to unlock the gates, but frankly the marble slab was too fucking cold. Nevertheless, the look on his face was priceless as he arrived to thrust the iron key into the gate lock.
“By the Priest Kings!!” he swore.
I didn’t waste any time as he opened the door. “Where am I? Where is my sword and tunic? What happened to me?”
“You… you’re dead,” spluttered the man.
I didn’t even bother to answer that. I just grabbed the man by his tunic and pulled him close. “Where is my slave? Where are my things?”
“I… I don’t know what you’re talking about! I just attend to the bodies… you’re supposed to be dead!”
“Stop saying that, you idiot. How long have I been in here?”
The man examined the tag on my wrist. “You were delivered yesterday. You were proclaimed dead by a physician! This cannot be!”
“I had a slave, a girl called Kayra. Where is she?”
“I don’t know! You were just brought in dead! Your soul should be with the Priest Kings now!”
“They didn’t want me,” I snarled. “Apparently, I lowered the tone of the afterlife by saying ’fuck’ a lot. Listen to me, I had a slave – what would have happened to her if a physician had declared her master was dead?”
“I… I suppose… the city pens?”
“How do I get there?”
The man babbled some directions and I made him repeat them three times to be sure. It turns out there were some spare work tunics in a side room, and the man was persuaded to let me have one. I dressed quickly and climbed the stone steps to the ground floor, and then exited the building at a fast pace.
It was daybreak and the sun was rising in the sky. Whatever the hour was, it was early enough that the streets were mostly empty. Only a few men were on their way to work, and I hurried past them, following the route described to me by the mausoleum attendant. Kayra might be in the city slave pens. Worrying as that prospect was, it was a better alternative than being in Sally’s clutches.
And of course the slave pens weren’t open to the public yet. I fumed and bided my time for another half an ahn before the doors swung open and I hurried inside to the public administrative desk.
“May I help you…” began the scribe who was taking up position behind the desk.
“Was my slave brought in here yesterday? A slave called Kayra? I was mistakenly presumed dead and taken to the city mausoleum. Obviously, I’m not dead. I’m trying to find my slave.”
“How remarkable,” said the scribe. “Kayra, you say?”
I quickly described her appearance, hoping that might help, and then I waited anxiously as the man inspected the written records from yesterday.
“We do indeed have your slave, though no owner’s name is recorded. She self-identified as Kayra, and so she has been recorded as Kayra.”
“I want her back,” I said.
“Well, of course.” The man nodded. “I will need to see your ownership papers.”
My heart sank. “I don’t have them. I was attacked in an alleyway. My possessions were taken.”
“Ah, that is unfortunate.”
“The slave will confirm I am her master,” I said.
“Unfortunately, a slave’s testimony of ownership is worthless, except in some judicial court matters, under the provision of applied torture,” said the man. “A slave could easily claim to belong to someone else in order to escape a master she doesn’t care for.”
“She was with me when she was taken,” I said.
“Without papers of ownership to hand you could have stolen her. The fact she has no owner marked on the ledger usually means there is some doubt as to who owns the slave.”
“I own the slave!”
“There is no need to raise your voice with me, Sir,” said the scribe. He pointed to a small sign nailed to the wall behind his desk.
“I can’t read that,” I snarled.
“It says, ‘politeness costs nothing’.”
“Does it.” I gritted my teeth. “How do I collect my slave?”
“You produce your papers of ownership, Sir.”
“I told you I was attacked in an alley. Everything I owned was taken.”
“The master copies of your papers will be lodged in the Cylinder of Records, Sir. You need only call there and request a new copy.”
My heart sank, for of course the Cylinder of Records wouldn’t have any papers on Kayra.
“She is a new capture,” I said. “Papers haven’t yet been lodged with the Cylinder of Records.”
“Well, that is unfortunate.”
“What happens now?” I asked, trying to maintain a degree of civility.
“The matter can be passed on to a city magistrate. In such cases notification is made regarding your slave, inviting her owner to step forward and make a claim. If no man or woman does so with twenty days, then you can make a claim on her yourself. A magistrate will rule on the matter, and, if he is satisfied with the circumstances you describe, the slave will be released into your custody.”
“I don’t have twenty days!” I snarled.
“What you don’t have, Sir, is your slave. If you want your slave…”
“Fuck!” I gazed at the corridor that led from this reception area and into the pens beyond. There was another locked set of iron railings blocking the way, and the area beyond would be teeming with overseers and jailers. Kayra was effectively locked in a high security prison. “Can I at least see my slave?”
“Slave viewings are available from the 10th ahn. There is a bench over there,” he said, pointing with an outstretched quill.
I sat and I waited until the bells for the tenth ahn were rung.
Within a few ehn I was being escorted into the kennel area by a broad shouldered man who looked like he could bench press me with one hand. “You must work out a lot?” I said, trying to make some conversation as we walked past an exercise yard and then past a series of store rooms.
“Nothing much else to do in Torcadino,” he replied. We descended a set of stone steps into a basement area where ‘masterless’ slaves were kennelled. “Mind your head,” he said, as I stooped when we entered one of the tunnels. There was no natural light down here, but lanterns were hung on the damp stone walls every ten feet or so. We passed a number of communal cages, each one housing up to five slaves. They knelt in a thick carpet of straw and watched us walk by, noting that I wasn’t wearing the uniform of a jailer, and that meant I was possibly here to claim a girl.
“Kennel thirteen,” said the jailer as we stopped beside one of the stone chambers that had bars across the front. I recognised her instantly. She looked miserable, sitting on her own in the straw with her knees tucked up under her chin. Her hair was lank and uncombed and she stared in fear through the corner of her eyes at the other four girls who knelt together on the other side of the pen, talking to one another.
There were switch marks on Kayra’s thighs. As soon as she heard my voice, she jumped to her feet and ran to the bars.
“Master!” she cried. “You’re alive!”
She reached with her hands through the bars, trying to touch me.
“No contact with the slave,” said the jailer. “Not until we know she’s yours.”
“He is my Master!” she wept. “He owns me!”
Oh, Kayra, have you any idea what you’re saying, I thought to myself.
“It’s okay, Kayra. Everything will be okay,” I said to the young girl as she pressed her face against the bars.
“It’s not okay! You have to get me out of here! Those other girls…” she glanced fearfully over her shoulder. The other four slaves were watching this exchange with interest.
“We don’t have much time Kayra. Tell me what happened. Tell me what happened after I seemed to die.”
“I started screaming when the physician said you were dead,” sobbed Kayra. “When I wouldn’t stop I was lashed with a switch until I did. The woman from Argentum tried to claim me, but one of the men was suspicious with her story. He called a guardsman and the guardsman agreed that your death had to be investigated. The Argentum woman continued to protest but was escorted away to the Cylinder Of Justice. I was then leashed and taken away. I wasn’t even allowed to go near your body.”
So, Sally had been taken to the Cylinder of Justice pending an investigation into the circumstances of my death? There were prison cells there, the quality of which was determined by whether or not a prisoner could pay for comfortable lodging, or whether they would be simply housed in holdings pens not much better than these slave kennels. Sally had money, so I suspected she would be housed in a cell that had certain comforts. She would have privacy, a cot with a mattress and reasonable meals, and a window that let in light.
“Have you seen Adam or Felix?” I asked.
“No, Master, I haven’t. I… I followed you when the fighting started. I was afraid what might happen to you.”
“That was stupid, Kayra. You were supposed to stay with Adam!”
“So were you, Master,” she said. “And if I hadn’t, you’d be dead now. That Argentum slut would have stuck her hair pin through your eye and into your brain!” And it was true. I softened my tone.
“Why did you follow me?’
“I was afraid for you,” said Kayra, as she pressed her cheek to the bars again. ”I… I care for you… you… you must know that?”
“You’re the daughter of a Tatrix,” I whispered. “You can’t allow yourself to care for anyone. YOU know that.”
The girl sobbed beside the bars. “I can’t help how I feel! Why does that have to be wrong? I have dreams…”
“You are going to be the companion of the Ubar’s son. We will never see each other again,” I said. And that made her cry again. “It’s your duty, Kayra. Your life is not your own.”
She sobbed, but nodded. I felt sorry for the girl. She would spend her life as a political pawn, locked up in a gilded tower in a city that was not her home, and she would know little, if any, true love. it was the price she paid for being who she was.
“What now?” she asked, clutching at the bars. “I have to get out of this slave kennel.”
“They won’t release you to me because I don’t have papers of ownership. This may take time to resolve.”
A look of abject fear crossed her face then. “I don’t have time!” She shook at the bars. “They call me Fire Crotch!” Her previously shaved pubic hair was beginning to show as fine stubble.
“It’s not ideal, Kayra, but you have to remain strong.”
“It’s not a matter of being strong. They are going to brand me tonight!”
“What?”
“Yes! At the sixteenth ahn! A metal worker will do the rounds. I will be branded and my ears will be pierced in accordance with Torcadino law. I have less than six ahn before that happens.”
Fuck.
And suddenly, just like that, I had a deadline.
The clock, and Goreans have fine clocks, so Tarl Cabot informs us, is ticking.
ReplyDeleteKayra has certainly bollixed up the Tatrix's plans by self-enslavement, just as Roland has by his intemperate actions.
I still suspect that this is all another feint of the Tatrix, that Kayra is one of a pair of twins, and the real daughter is on her way by another route to Torcadino. Kayra may not even be the daughter of the Tatrix, but a slave reared as such against such an eventuality.
So many wheels within wheels.
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DeleteHappy Turkey Day, Master. :)
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DeleteI think things look bad for Roland and Kayra. Tracker has a good point. BUT when they entered the city, Roland claimed a slave named Kayra on the entry visa and while his copy may have been taken with his things. There should still be a copy on file with the city. That would be my move as well as getting myself declared not dead and my belongings back
Clever Master. :) The question is will Roland be as clever as you?
DeleteTracker:
Delete(1) Kayra only bollixes the Tatrix’s plans if Kayra doesn’t become the free companion of the Ubar’s son.
(2) Roland thinks, “I was somewhat pragmatic. … Kayra was a slave now, but she’d still companion the Ubar’s son if I had any say in the matter. Her self-enslavement was an inconvenience that I’d just have to ignore.”
(3) Of course, it’s fraud. Adam is okay because he and Roland have “more pragmatic Earth minds,” and he overlooks Gorean Common Capture Law (Chapter Twelve). Felix has qualms, suspecting Kayra is a slave.
(4) Kayra has said previously that she is dedicated to her mother and Corcyrus and will enter into a loveless free companionship. She does not realize she self-enslave herself twice. Roland won’t educate her; he didn’t educate her about Gorean Common Capture Law.
(5) The three men and the physician in the alley and the body builder at the city pens don’t realize Kayra is a free woman, let alone Lady Laetitia, the daughter of the Tatrix of Corcyrus. They aren’t aware of her self-enslavement and will not recognize her veiled and in robes of concealment.
(6) The only danger is Sally knows Kayra is the daughter of the Tatrix of Corcyrus. Enslaving Sally to silence her may be insufficient since slaves can testify in some court matters under torture. Roland is too soft to kill Sally. Adam is not.
(7) Roland has not bollixed up the Tatrix’s plans YET. What matters is that the Ubar’s son and Kayra, whatever her status, become free companions and Torcadino sends aid that saves Corcyrus.
(8) However it happens, the Tatrix’s plan is fulfilled. As for fraud, Kayra is supposed to be frigid, so the Tatrix has ordered Roland to secretly give Kayra a serum to suppress her slave responses.
(9) Roland doesn’t want Kayra as his slave. She’s save his life twice. (Chapters Fourteen and Thirty Two) She’d be a very jealous kajira and a physical danger to Maia/Kelly.
vyeh
Emma:
ReplyDelete(1) I am so happy to see Chapter Thirty Three! In addition to constantly checking for it for two days, I reviewed “Move Well Kajira,” a gem by Arizona Wanderer in the 72nd, 73rd and 74th comments of the 99 comments to The Emma of Gor Trilogy: An Introduction and read two stories by Peony D Beckside, Tracker’s protege, on literotica.
(2) The naked red-haired slim scratched-up chained slave girl with small breasts and slim hips in the wonderful illustration must be Kayra. Sally’s hair is dark brown. (Steel World Inc. Chapter Twenty Eight)
(3) A great transition from Roland lying on a marble slab at the end of previous Chapter Thirty Two to him sitting up is the marvelous descriptive opening line: “It took some effort, and my muscles screamed and protested every inch of the way, but I forced myself first into a sitting position, and then as circulation returned to my legs I pushed up onto my feet again.”
(4) First paragraph, only sentence: “It took some … onto my feet again.” —> … onto my feet.” (Last time Roland was on his feet was ahns ago in the alley.)
(5) Great reference in the second paragraph: “Like Lazarus, I had risen.” I think “Like Christ, I had risen” would have a stronger impact, conveying the miraculous and possibly divine nature of Roland’s resurrection.
(6) I love the practicality of the opening line of the third paragraph: “One thing for certain, I’d better not get into any fights for a while.” Great description of Roland’s location and predicament, fourteen feet below “barred windows … too narrow … to squeeze through.”
(7) I like the fourth paragraph reminding us of the last chapter with Roland’s painful breathing and the fight between Kayra and Sally, “Each breath hurt, but not nearly as badly as in the narrow side passage when Sally and Kayra had been fighting like two rival alley cats.”
(8) Fifth (last before the “Read more >>” break) paragraph, first line: “This had to … bodies could be taken to and stored prior to…” —> … to be stored …”
(9) The last line of the fifth paragraph and the last line before the “Read more >>” break — “I was beginning to wonder if supernatural forces really were keeping me alive for some unfathomable reason.” — refers to the sleen at the end of Chapter Nine and to “I know there are no gods” at the beginning of Chapter Ten.
(10) First paragraph after the “Read more >>” break (“What had happened …”), third sentence: “Had Sally Reeves succeeded in …” —> … Sally Reeve succeeded …
(11) I love the first paragraph after the “Read more >>” break laying out all the possibilities after Roland passed out.
(12) In the second paragraph after the “Read more >> “ break, Roland picks up on Kayra’s self enslavement in the alley.
(13) In the third paragraph after the “Read more >>” break, Roland declares himself pragmatic. However, he also enslaved Kayra in Chapter Ten, when he, an accredited slaver, collared her in the wilderness; however, he chose not to file papers. I love the last sentence, “Her self-enslavement was an inconvenience that I’d just have to ignore.”
(14) Fourth paragraph after the “Read more >>” break (“I gazed at …”), last sentence: “In the long term … friends within the city — longstanding agents … diplomatic channels that could …” —> … diplomatic channels — that could …
(15) Roland’s thoughts in the fourth paragraph after the “Read more >>” break lays out the best and worst cases. Worst case: Sally has flown Kayra out of Torcadino. Corcyrus has lost. Best case: The third man has Sally taken into custody for Roland’s death. Sally would be confined for a day or two before her powerful friends released her.
(16) In the fourth paragraph, Roland wonders if he underestimated Sally because of her sex. In the fifth paragraph, he concludes “physical strength meant the differen[ce] between domination and submission.”
(17) Fifth paragraph after the “Read more >>” break (“I smiled as …”), fourth sentence: “Here, on Gor, physical strength meant the different between …” —> … the difference between …
tbc
ctd
Delete(18) Sixth paragraph after the “Read more >>” break, first sentence: “I rose from … the mausoleum, tracing …” —> … the mortuary, tracing … (A mausoleum permanently entombs the dead; a mortuary temporarily stores the dead.) Roland is locked in and time is against him.
(19) In the seventh paragraph, Roland considers the nightmare scenario that Kayra is branded. “That would be game over for the Corcyrus/Torcadino alliance.” Roland is locked in for the night with time pressure!
(21) Eighth paragraph after the “Read more >>” break, only sentence: “And so I … until day break.” —> … until daybreak.
(22) Ninth paragraph after the “Read more >>” break, first sentence: “I had considered … the mausoleum attendant …” —> … the mortuary attendant … (A mausoleum permanently entombs the dead; a mortuary temporarily stores the dead.)
(23) The priceless and hilarious exchange between the astonished attendant and frustrated Roland, ‘“Your soul should be with the Priest Kings now.” “They didn’t want me. … Apparently, I lowered the tone of the afterlife by saying ‘fuck’ a lot.”’
(24) Paragraph where the attendant gives directions to the city pens (“The man babbled …”), third (last) sentence: “I dressed quickly and climbed the stone steps …, and then exited…” —> … dressed quickly, climbed the …, and then exited …
(25) Paragraph after Roland leaves the mortuary (“It was daybreak …), third sentence: “Only a few … the mausoleum attendant.” —> … the mortuary attendant. (A mausoleum permanently entombs the dead; a mortuary temporarily stores the dead.)
(26) Paragraph after the bureaucratic scribe opens the conversation (‘“Was my slave …”’), third sentence: “I was mistakenly presumed dead … the city mausoleum.” —> … city mortuary. (A mausoleum permanently entombs the dead; a mortuary temporarily stores the dead.)
(27) Paragraph during the conversation with the bureaucratic scribe, first sentence: ‘“Without papers of ownership to hand you could …”’ —> … to hand me you could …
(28) The conversation between the bureaucratic scribe and the increasingly frustrated Roland is exquisite. I love Roland’s exchange with the bodybuilder, ‘“You must work out a lot?” … “Nothing much else to do in Torcadino,” he replied.’
(29) Paragraph where Roland sees Kayra (“‘Kennel thirteen,” said …’), after the second sentence (“I recognised her instantly.”), add “She was naked.” (A reader unfamiliar with Gorean customs would be confused why Kayra’s pubic stubble was visible when she was wearing a tunic in the last chapter.)
(30) Poor Kayra, the daughter of the Tatrix, with signs of her first beating, switch marks on her thighs, and staring “in fear through the corners of her eyes at the other four girls who knelt together on the other side of the pens.”
(31) Kayra seeing Roland, ‘“Master! … You’re alive. … He’s my Master! … He owns me.” Oh, Kayra, have you any idea of what you’re saying, [Roland] thought to [him]self.’ In Outcast Chapter Thirty Three, she momentarily forgot that a man saving a woman may enslave her. Maybe she isn’t familiar with words of self-enslavement.
(32) First paragraph of Kayra’s explanation (‘“I started screaming …”’), third sentence : “The woman from Argentum … suspicious with her story.” —> … suspicious of her story. Fifth sentence: “The Argentum woman … the Cylinder Of Justice.” —> … Cylinder of Justice.
(33) What an exchange between Roland and Kayra! ‘“Why did you follow me?” “I was afraid for you. … I… I care for you… you… you must know that?” “You’re the daughter of a Tatrix. … You can’t allow yourself to care for anyone. YOU know that.” “I can’t help how I feel. Why does that have to be wrong? I have dreams…” “You are going to be the companion of the Ubar’s son. We will never see each other again. … It’s your duty. Your life is not your own.”’
(34) Paragraph after Kayra declares her forbidden love (“She sobbed, but …”), third and fourth (last two) sentences: “… love. it was …” —> … love. It was …
tbc
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Delete(35) The tension quickly escalates, ‘“They call me Fire Crotch.” Her previously shaved pubic hair was beginning to show as fine stubble. “It’s not ideal, Kayra, but you have to remain strong.” “It’s not a matter of being strong. They’re going to brand me tonight! … I have less than six ahn before that happens.”’
(36) Masterful ending, “And suddenly, just like that, I had a deadline.”
(37) I initially read this chapter very slowly, in some cases rereading long paragraphs, savoring each word. I wasn’t disappointed. Your writing, especially the conversations with the attendant, the scribe, the bodybuilder and Kayra were wonderful. The descriptions of the mortuary and the city pens were vivid.
(38) I thoroughly enjoyed the second and third readings and found additional corrections. You started with Roland, naked and alone, and ratcheted up the tension. He is locked in. He needs slave papers. Kayra will be branded in six ahn.
(39) Kayra’s unrequited feelings have developed. In Chapter Fourteen, she fakes the need to go to the toilet to get him away from the camp and saves his life from Mishka’s surprised sword attack. She asks Roland to hold her in Fifteen after the other three huntresses capture Adam and Felix. In Sixteen, she kisses him and says, “What am I to you? Nothing. I am laughable.”
(40) Roland has to find Adam and Felix. Roland didn’t hear gunshots and Sally’s four ruffians didn’t back up Sally, suggesting Adam and Felix killed, wounded or led away the ruffians, but were unable to find Kayra in time to save her from the city pens.
(41) The group has to get Kayra out of the pens before she is branded at the sixteenth ahn.
(42) The group has to wait another week and a half for Kayra’s fine pubic stubble to grow out. Sally can identify Kayra and Roland for sure and Adam and Felix perhaps. They want to neutralize Sally if they can.
(43) Adam and Roland are pursuing Caitlin Ambrose and Kelly Milford, respectively, although Roland doesn’t think about Kelly during the last two chapters, even when he reflects on his life as he was apparently dying.
(44) The group has to present Lady Laetitia to the Ubar. The presentation will be on the public calendar. They can expect Argentum assassins outside the palace.
(45) Roland has to give Lady Laetitia the slave response suppressing serum before her test by a female physician. He lost the vial along with his other possessions.
(46) Nia, a former savage and cruel huntress, is a potential wild card. Can they offer her freedom for killing Sally? Lady Livinnia Assante is gone, but life as a freed woman is preferable to a brand.
(47) We can expect Svetlana and Stannis Assante to show up, one to avenge Rolfe, the other to avenge his enslaved Free Companion.
(48) Sally was recruited as a computer operator. Why has she been for ten years a more effective Kur agent than any other agent except Rachel, whom Kurgus ordered to be captured by Brinn?
(49) I’ve spent eight enjoyable hours reading and reviewing this chapter. Thank you.
vyeh